October 31, 2013

Life in Eden changed.

     "I've got to tell you something that's really important," she said, "and I have to do it right now." She didn't know what she was going to say, but she knew she was going to say it wrong.
     "Woah," he stopped, "Am I ready for this?" he asked.
     "I need to know something," she paid no attention to his question, "and I'm not going to even think for the next five minutes, I'm just going to say stuff," she wiped her forehead. "I'm sweating."
     "Okay, well tell me, then." He was collected, with his fingers laced together. His hands cupped a pocked around his knee.
     "I am in carnival-ride-anxiety with you," she blurted. He laughed. "I'm serious."
     "So, I'm just going to be upfront. I don't know where this is going," he said and Funny, she thought, me either. 
     "Well, I mean it," she went on, "I'm in airplane-descent with you. Rock-climbing-wall-no-chalk with you."
     "I don't know what words you're trying to find, but these aren't doing much for me," he remarked. She just kept going.
     "Once, after my dad took the training wheels off my bike, I rode it down this big hill in our front yard. I couldn't remember how to use the brakes and so I smashed into the front step so hard that I flipped over the handlebars and got a fat lip. And I felt that same flip thing in my gut the time you made me go with you to buy new dress shoes."
     "I make you feel like you've been flipped over the handlebars of a bike?!"
     "Yeah," she said, "and also, I might love you," she said, and that was the ticket and he got it.


  1. i like the way you write. someone once told me recently they could feel the nervousness in my character i was writing about and i thought to myself, "damn... that's about the only thing a writer could ask for, for the reader to feel the emotions of their character." and well, i could feel hers. nicely done :)

  2. this really epitomizes the way that word people and not word people communicate. at least it did for me. So good, as usual.

  3. Gah you are perfect. I know I've said this before but your gift for dialogue is amazing. I am so envious of your effortless dialogues. You are awesome.

    Also I ADORE your new header on the blog! Cutest in the world.

    Tightrope to the Sun

  4. ugh why am I so obsessed with you. I hope you know I obsessively read every single post of yours (multiple times, with a fine-toothed comb). I don't always comment because it's usually really late at night when I need some emotional feeding. BUT that being said. I think you're brilliant, I really truly do.


i like words. and you. write me a few?